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Jupiter coffee shop by igrenic Jupiter coffee shop by igrenic
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Given 2013-01-14
:iconjoeltonongkh:
joeltonongkh Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
Impressive composition and typeface used. Nice combination of colors.
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:iconokayokayokok:
okayokayokok Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
Do they ship to the United States?
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:iconlilshiniko:
lilshiniko Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
The design is decent, although in my opinion the "chalkboard effect" can be a little cliché for coffee shops nowadays. I do have some issues with grammar/stylistic choices though.

High Quality Goods
vs.
High Quality of Goods

The "of" is unnecessary, just as it is in the picture above. If you are a native English speaker, read it aloud and you should understand the awkwardness. "High Quality Weed or Haze" is fine.

Also, "for best and nice atmosphere" sounds broken. "Best" is a superlative, while "nice" is only an adjective. When you say that something is the "best" you are putting it above all else. This makes the above sentence sound awkward to native English readers/speakers.

I would probably rewrite it as this:

"oriental and local products available for the best experience" (or experience could be altered to "atmosphere")

There is also an indicator above the 5 euro that says that the price starts there, but there is no similar notice above the price for coffee. Are we to assume that all coffee costs 2,50 euro? I would probably add the "starts from" that is above the price for weed/haze to the coffee as well, unless there really is a flat price for coffee. I would also remove the "list" from "Read our full menu list" because of redundancy. I'd use "Read our full menu here" and make it a link.

I would also say that the two different "names" could be confusing to some. The official name (going by the logo in the upper and lower left corners) is "Jupiter Coffee Shop" while the page itself says "Cafe Jupiter." It's really just a minor thing, but when someone is looking for a restaurant either online or in real life, you should make sure that they can find you by a specific name. You're building a brand and you want to reinforce brand recognition.

"Designed" is misspelled as "desined" in the bottom right corner.
I will assume that "Fotogallery" is intentional. But if not, it's spelled "Photo" in English. (I'm aware that many other languages use "foto" and that it has also become an acceptable "slang" spelling in English.)

Overall not bad, but not spectacular either. I'm sorry for the people who think it's awesome. Feel free to call me a hater. /shrug

But since I just saw that the artist is from the Czech Republic and I can safely assume that he is not a native English speaker, I understand the grammatical problems. Nevertheless if I were a paying customer I would be a little upset with some of the issues listed. Not that they couldn't be fixed, but it just strikes as either unprofessional or lazy. Remember, just as the coffee shop is aiming to build brand recognition, so are you as an artist. I'm not trying to be insulting, but rather offering constructive criticism. If possible, I would try to have someone who is thoroughly knowledgeable about English review a piece that contains English before you publish it.
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VelvetFish Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student Filmographer
hey, you know what sounds good right now?

some weed.

(gratz on the DD!)
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D0m1ng0 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student Photographer
Verry nice Design but one critique! The of in "High quality of weed or haze" is unneeded and awkward.
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:iconhyenacub-stock:
hyenacub-stock Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
Actually, taking the word "of" out, it is fine. "or haze" could also be dropped and make it simpler and still funny. : D
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:iconhemphat:
HempHat Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
May I ask you how it is unneeded and awkward? :giggle:
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:iconlilshiniko:
lilshiniko Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
Grammatically speaking.

High Quality Goods
vs.
High Quality of Goods

The "of" is unnecessary, just as it is in the picture above. If you are a native English speaker, read it aloud and you should understand the awkwardness.
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:iconhemphat:
HempHat Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Perhaps it is just me, but I don't find it awkward. No idea why. :shrug:
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:iconsammuleoden:
SamMuleOden Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
.....I WANT TO GO
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:iconensoul:
ensoul Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional General Artist
Cute design, although 'for best and nice atmosphere' doesn't seem to make a lot of sense, is that just me?
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:iconchinopisces:
chinopisces Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
I do have one critique, though. Jupiter's axial tilt is much less than that. It's only 3°.
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ToothlessEgo Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student Digital Artist
For designs sake I think it looks better as it is.
And since a planet isn't always viewed from a standard angle it seems justifiable to me.
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chinopisces Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
Of course, because angles are more dramatic than verticals and horizontals.

However, as a designer, you should be aware that any critique, no matter how seemingly petty or benign, is still a point of contention. I'm quite certain I'm not the only one who will notice this tiny detail -- especially fans of Jupiter. I am justified in my position just as much as the designer is justified in his.
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ToothlessEgo Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Well certainly it's a fair critique. Just looking at it in terms of aesthetics.
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chinopisces Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
I want to go here!
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:iconjjgp:
JJGP Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Love it.
What font did you use?
Thanks!
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:iconigrenic:
igrenic Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student Interface Designer
KG Ten Thousand Reasons... ;)this [link]
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:iconjjgp:
JJGP Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thanks mate!
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:iconmisterturtle:
MisterTurtle Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
Really wish that whatever moral-gaurdian fuckwit decided that something that is accepted in most European cultures is evil, and delegated it to the underground where it fuels criminal enterprise.

I digress. Nice poster. :meow:
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tomomi-mizuna-tio Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Umm... I have an answer to that actually. At least for why it is illegal in the U.S.A. I am not a 'user' myself, but I have done research into the topic as I often wondered why such a virtually harmless substance would be banned from the general public.
It was the pharmaceutical, paper, and clothing industries along as many social issues including racism and just general intolerance. Hemp (which is not the same as marijuana, mind you.) Can be used for so many things, such as clothing, rope, paper, the list goes on and on and on really. But the people who were making their living with cotton and wood fiber products (and the new and rising nylon industries) were threatened by this inexpensive material as competition so they started a movement to ban it. This movement also included marijuana because not many people can get it through their heads that just because the plants look the same does not make them the same plant. The problem with the pharmaceutical companies could not regulate the dosages on marijuana and it was simple to grow in the home which would take money away from them.
Racism factors in as marijuana was used in the early jazz and blues scene frequently. This scene consisted of a not insignificant amount of African Americans and it was the way of the time to try and keep them as separate from the white community as possible. The general media claimed that marijuana was making the A.A. population bold enough to challenge the white authority and that it was being pushed on white children as a way to warp their minds.
I could keep going but I think I have rambled enough.
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Geke-sulen Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student Artist
Really informative!
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:icontomomi-mizuna-tio:
tomomi-mizuna-tio Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I am glad you think so.
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:icongeke-sulen:
Geke-sulen Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student Artist
I think they should keep it illegal in the states or else the economy of my country will go bad ;p
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tomomi-mizuna-tio Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I disagree. If they could find a proper way to tax it I think it would work well. There would be less convictions for marijuana arrests, in addition. Less arrests= Less federal money spent to hold prisoners for their "Crimes".
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:icongeke-sulen:
Geke-sulen Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student Artist
That's true... But now the Dutch economy is going bad :(
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tomomi-mizuna-tio Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It could factor in but there are always several causes.
American economy is already bad.
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MisterTurtle Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
That was really informative, thanks :meow:

Greed leads to greed, I spose.
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tomomi-mizuna-tio Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Not a problem.
Greed is a powerful thing.
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:iconeuxiom:
Euxiom Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
Awesome design!
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:iconigrenic:
igrenic Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student Interface Designer
thanks ;)
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:iconzee-who:
Zee-Who Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist
Congrats on your Daily Deviation!:squee::heart:
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:iconigrenic:
igrenic Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student Interface Designer
thanks ;)
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EdgeFan Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I giggled when I saw the weed label XD
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soFLOo Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student General Artist
here u cant sell weed like that XD
nice idea ;)
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:iconklangphase:
Klangphase Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
Clean, simple and straight to the point. Grats for the DD.
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:iconigrenic:
igrenic Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student Interface Designer
thanks ;)
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Tyger-graphics Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional General Artist
Funny how normal things in one country are looked at with horror and/or disdain in another.

Love is universal.
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:iconskadoske:
Skadoske Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I lol'd so bad at the weed.
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:iconkalic00:
kalic00 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
why? thats what they sell at coffe shops in some european countries
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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:iconigrenic:
igrenic Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student Interface Designer
thanks ;)
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure :happybounce:
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dar-a Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student General Artist
the blackboard idea is fantastic! amazibg design, congrats on DD!
(lol'd at weed though. XD )
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igrenic Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Student Interface Designer
thanks ;)
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SaveTheCRT Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
Weeeeed! Is this a Dutch coffee shop?
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ValerieAnna Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
+31, so yes it's Dutch. :)
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SaveTheCRT Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
Ohh, thanks! :D
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:iconigrenic:
igrenic Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Student Interface Designer
No it´s from Holland near Utrecht ;)
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SaveTheCRT Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013
Dutch means from Holland though. :D
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